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“高能段落 都是干货”(第二弹)

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摘要:本文由小马过河的徐硕烁老师原创。积累素材和表达是贯穿我们写作学习全程的任务。为了让大家更加有效的积累素材和表达,能够做到充分理解加合理使用,这次依然给大家带来一个高能段落。

  本文由小马过河的徐硕烁老师原创。积累素材和表达是贯穿我们写作学习全程的任务。为了让大家更加有效的积累素材和表达,能够做到充分理解加合理使用,这次依然给大家带来一个高能段落。对于高能段落不清楚是咋回事的同学,可以看一下先前的一篇文章,传送门在此《“高能段落 全是干货”(第一弹)》

  本次段落来自www.xiaomatuofu.com记忆复写模块第六篇文章的第二段和第四段。为了更好的塑造一个高能段落,我把这两段整合了一下。

  文章题目是:

  Do you agree or disagree: Governments should spend more money in sponsoring arts than in athletics.

  整合后段落具体内容如下:

  Firstly, it is high time that government should arouse people’s awareness of the importance of physical soundness. With the acceleration of social development, people, especially young people, are confronted with unprecedentedly fierce competition. They need to work very hard to guarantee a decent life, as a result of which a great many of them suffer a lot from the irregular lifestyle that they are cast into involuntarily. For instance, they have to sleep at a late hour and consume a large quantity of alcohol to release pressure, which makes them susceptible to a sub-health condition. If they could pay more attention to health and give up their unhealthy lifestyles, their overall health status will be improved.

  逻辑梳理:

  这个段落的逻辑大致分为四部分。

  主题句:政府应该提高人们对健康重要性的认识。

  现状分析:人们压力很大,生活方式不健康。

  具体描述:具体描述前面生活方式不健康,用睡得很晚和喝酒来丰富细节。

  解决办法:更关注健康

  这个段落因为是整合的,所以最后一句并没有很好的和政府职责衔接起来。不过无所谓,因为这段学习的目的不是为了原封不动的直接塞到其他作文里,而是要进行适当的修改和衔接。这段的语料还是很不错的。

  语言表达:

  1. it is high time that XXX should do sth. / xxx did sth. 该是XXX做某事的时候了。

  在我们想强调某个主体该做某事的时候,都可以用得到。比如政府要保护环境,发展经济,增加科研投入;年轻人要提高能力,减轻压力,多陪家人等。

  注意:这个句型有两种写法,意思一样。要么就是should do,要么就是did。

  2.be confronted with... 面临面对的意思。

  在写作中我们经常会表达面临风险、压力、难题等。这是一个很实用的表达。

  类似的表达还有 be faced with

  还有个表达叫 in the face of。但是这个表达和前两个的意思还不太一样,大家不要随意替换。这个表达有两个意思。都很实用。

  第一个是

  despite problems, difficulties, etc.

  即使面对(问题、困难等):

  She showed great courage in the face of danger.

  面对危险她表现出了巨大的勇气。

  强调的是有一个即使的感觉。如果你想表达他面临困难是个怂B,就不要用 in the face of. 只有在面临困难、问题是迎难而上才可以用这个表达。

  第二个意思其实更加好用

  as a result of sth

  由于;因为:

  He was unable to deny the charges in the face of new evidence.

  面对新的证据,他无法否认被控告的罪。

  在写作的时候咱们经常会用到因为所以这种表达,下次再表达因为的时候不如试一下in the face of

  3. guarantee a decent life 确保一个体面的生活

  高频表达。无论是好好学习还是好好工作,到头来都是为了guarantee a decent life.

  4. as a result of which 所以

  刚才提到 in the face of 是因为,这里正好来一个所以。as a result of which 的用法就相当于so。 注意,in the face of 后面要加的是名词成分,as a result of which 后面要加的是一个完整的句子。

  5. be susceptible to 易受影响(或伤害等)

  在表示某人容易受到什么的影响时,咱不能只会affect吧。比如咱们要说小孩子容易受到电视中不良内容的影响,可以怎么说呢?

  Children,lacking the ability to distinguish between right and wrong, are susceptible to age-inappropriate content of TV programs.

  段落套用:

  一个段子如果只能用在一个题目里,未免可惜,除否考到原题,否则岂不是只能用用刚才的表达了?虽然不至于一无所获,但总归没有最大化利用段落的价值。下面咱们就讲一些相关话题甚至看上去没什么关系的话题,看看如何使用这个高能段落。

  Agree or disagree: Physical exercise is more important to older people than younger people.

  这个题是上次出现过的题目哈。上次说了年轻人锻炼可以让自己自律。还有一个就是年轻人不健康。这次咱们就把这次讲的段落套用进去。

  Firstly, it is high time that young people should devote more time to physical exercise. With the acceleration of social development, young people are confronted with unprecedentedly fierce competition. They need to work very hard to guarantee a decent life, as a result of which a great many of them suffer a lot from the irregular lifestyle that they are cast into involuntarily. For instance, they have to sleep at a late hour and consume a large quantity of alcohol to release pressure, which makes them susceptible to a sub-health condition. If they could pay more attention to health and do more physical exercise, their overall health status will be improved.

  黑色部分是修改过的内容,是为了让段子更佳切题,尤其是最后一句,也突出一下对于年轻人的重要性。大家在套用段子的时候也要适当修改,避免跑题哈。

  Agree or disagree: Young people today are more likely to give time and effort to improve the world than young people were in the past.

  这个题目其实也很好写。大家不要把improve the world想的太可怕就可以。其实改善一下社区环境,扶老奶奶过马路都可以理解成improve the world. 咱们可以来一个一边倒的分类。没错,一边倒也可以分类。咱们可以把年轻人分成学生和刚参加工作的年轻人。对于现在学生他们不如过去的学生愿意做贡献了。因为现在的学生面临的学业压力更大了,根本没时间。以前的学生下课后还有时间摸鱼抓虾呢。对于刚参加工作的年轻人呢?也会比过去更忙,因为以前的年轻人虽然工资不高,但是社会节奏慢,很少加班。所以,还是有时间来帮帮别人的。但是现在年轻人,非常忙,天天加班,还不给加班费。当然没时间,也没心情去improve the world了。

  来个套用示范哈。

  With the acceleration of social development, modern young people are confronted with unprecedentedly fierce competition. They need to work very hard to guarantee a decent life, as a result of which a great many of them suffer a lot from the irregular lifestyle that they are cast into involuntarily. For instance, they have to sleep at a late hour and consume a large quantity of alcohol to release pressure, which makes them susceptible to a sub-health condition.Needless to say, the busy, stressed and unhealthy young people are hard-pressed to devote themselves to improving the world. However, young people in past were not faced with so much pressure thanks to the slower pace of life, and thus they were able to give more time to their communities or neighbors.

  思考题:

  根据刚才的方法,大家可以看一下下面的思路,想一下可以如何套用这个段落。如果想不出来或者想参考一下我的思路,可以进群索取哈!

  Agree or disagree, it is better to spend money to traveling or vacation than save money for future.

  Agree or disagree, people should buy things made by their own country, even if things of other countries may cost less.

  Agree or disagree, people would be happier if they had fewer possessions.

  Should we focus on those big dreams or realistic goals?

  Is it more important for government to provide money for the things that are beautiful than things that are practical.

  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and televisions have more positive effects on the young people than negative effects.



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